Not a bad track
Awesome track, it's just that squeaky noise... it hurts. People wouldn't wanna hear it in a club :P if you substitute that for some percussion i think you have a winner! Also, did you put the snare on the 1 and 3 beats? It'd sound better on 2 and 4. Just saying :P
And the zero bomber shit... for get about it. If you make contacts with other producers and rate each others stuff it makes sure you have effective reviews and rates!
Keep up the good work!